1. Make sure that, when you pull historical or factual information from outside sources, you’re citing those sources to ensure that proper credit is given. For the purposes of citation, it’s best to assume that there is no “common knowledge.”
2. I think you’re missing a word in your fourth line: “…grammar, which uses ‘if’ to talk about the result…”
3. When using items in a series, try to ensure that all items are the same part of speech. “To behave” is a verb infinitive, as is “to forgive” and “not retaliate.” Therefore, to ensure that all parts match, you can change “patience” to “be patient.”
4. I would alter your thesis a bit for clarity’s safe. You’fe highlighted important elements of the poem, but consider: “In ‘If,’ Rudyard Kipling successfully uses rhyme scheme, iambic pentameter, anaphora, metaphor, and antithesis.” When we proofread, much of our work involves pruning our prose. When you first write, the objective is to get words down on paper. When you go back to edit, the objective should be the make those words more effective and concise. 😉
5. When writing in MLA format, make sure you always write about literature in the present tense. For example, “Kipling uses alternate rhyme…”
6. Per Dictionary.com, a homonym is “each of two or more words having the same spelling or pronunciation but different meanings and origins.” I think that, when discussing the rhyme scheme here, you mean that the concluding words of each couplet demonstrate assonance, or the same vowel sound.
7. Be wary about using “as” when you really mean “because.”
8. You mention Kipling’s rhyme scheme and metric feet. You also mention his use of anaphora–but what do these elements do for the poem? How does iambic pentameter make the poem more or less effective? What about the rhyme scheme? Does the rhyme scheme shape the poem in a way that more clearly demonstrates Kipling’s point? These questions are the real meat of textual analysis–not merely the what, but the why. Why do you think he made the choices you’re observing? You do a lovely job of summarizing Kipling’s words and breaking down his meaning, but I’d love to see you take that a step further by demonstrating how the rhetorical choices he’s made enhance his meaning.
9. What does Kipling accomplish by capitalizing Triumph and Disaster? How do we read that line differently if those two concepts are proper nouns? Kipling is, arguably, telling his reader not to be swayed by the opinions and influences of others. If Triumph and Disaster are personified, does that make them equal to other people who might be outside influences?
10. Make sure you’re proofreading aloud! There are a few missing words here that can be caught that way. Often, our tongues trip over errors that our eyes miss. For example, “…people should keep their hearts from being distraught and battered…” (page 4).
11. Make sure you’re proofreading for run-on sentences! There are a few moments in here where your thoughts would have greater impact as two or three sentences instead of one.
12. You use the word “should” frequently when summarizing Kipling’s words, but Kipling himself doesn’t use language quite so forceful. What he says instead is “if you can,” which is a much gentler proposition. “Should” implies a degree of obligation; “if you can” implies a choice. How does this element of choice affect the tone of the poem?
13. You say, “Conversely, people will also lose everything they have” (page 4-5), but I think you can stop the sentence there.
14. You have another series at the top of page 6 that should be modified so each item is the same part of speech.
15. You mention Kipling’s employment of antithesis. I think this is a keen observation–especially because he establishes this concept of binary opposition to illustrate the importance of remaining in the middle. Are there other examples of this you could quote within the text? How else could you illustrate this point?
16. Make sure that your entries in your Works Cited page are alphabetized. Also, make sure that you’re including access dates for any electronic sources you use. Websites can change; you don’t want to be responsible for any changes to the material after the date you visited!
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